Early Morning Rain

Leaving for work
 Sky still dark
 Rain drizzling down
 Streets shining
     in the headlights
 Reflecting red streaks
     from the tail lights
 Tires humming
 Mist rising from beneath them
 Wipers swishing
 Raindrops now tapping
      a rhythm on the windshield
 Flashing red and blue lights
     at the scene of a crash
 Crumpled car sitting
     in a puddle of broken glass
 Gripping the wheel
 Driving on
 Turning in at school
 Breathing a sigh
     of relief
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9 Responses to Early Morning Rain

  1. vanessaw2007 says:

    I love the description and felt I was right along with you on your drive. I really love the sound lines, tires humming and the rhythm on the windshield. All of it!

  2. rdicarne says:

    I love your imagery – a puddle of broken glass. You really brought that morning dirve to life. Glad the flashing lights were not for you!

  3. Alice Nine says:

    Lovely descriptive poem. Great use of participles — no less than 16 of them, many functioning as adjectives. They infuse action into your description in a subtle way. I like your descriptive flow from sky to street, to car and then to you. Hmmm… I see a mentor text here.

  4. lizzypru says:

    I love that you wrote a poem. I’m still building up the courage to try it.

  5. Terje says:

    Your word choice in this poem puts me in the car, driving in the dark, seeing the crash and sighing in relief. I am thankful that several days a week I can take a train instead of driving.

  6. arjeha says:

    Great imagery. Can feel the tension as you drive and the relief once you arrive,

  7. Leigh Anne says:

    Nothing worse than driving in bad weather. Your choice of words create the perfect picture. Glad you made it safely!

  8. Ramona says:

    How did I miss this post? Is it okay for me to share your poem with Books, Brownies & Beyond for their response notebooks? I loved sharing your poems with students when I was teaching for Poetry Friday!

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